Aside from the University Activities Board usual Lil’ Sibs Weekend events, there was an increase in minority organizations hosting events this year, specifically Michigan State University’s African American community. Three campus organizations, Alpha Kappa Alpha Sorority Inc., Delta Zeta chapter, Successful Black Women and African American Student Mentor Program, collaborated and hosted the first annual Teen Sibs party, February 4th, 2011, in the Tower Room of the Union building. “We decided to host a party because we wanted to attract the teen 12 through 16 year-old crowd with something they would enjoy too, since most events at Lil’ Sibs Weekend are usually for younger kids,” said Alycia Chuney, Lyman Briggs Zoology senior and Secretary of AASMP.
This lead needs a stronger focus. Don't begin your lead with information that isn't necessarily relevant. Really focus in on your chosen focus for this story--the first annual Teen Sibs party hosted by three minority student groups as a way to do ??? Also watch your AP Style even in these exercises. Over time, I will be taking off points for style errors in these assignments.
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